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[Spoilers] Kagurabachi - Chapter 69 Discussion
Not sure how I feel about her suddenly being able to fight. We'll get the reveal she trained with her father, but there was nothing that led up to this, no sign of her being particularly good at sports, or noticing things without seeing them. No clue that might have been left behind even without her memories. Also doesn't help that the chapter was actually doing a good job of setting up her returning to school, which would have been an interesting deviation from what we were all expecting.
This arc as a whole needed way more time to cook. I'm ok with her unlocking memories of her training with Samura but I simply couldn't deal with the kid from school randomly stumbling into this hotel and then conveniently getting all the chips lined up perfectly to be led to the top floor of in the middle of the ongoing hell. This feels extremely rushed for an arc that's only been 10 chapters and the villains have been pretty poor. We need an arc to expand on the Hishaku, their motivations and how they operate.
He didn't "randomly stumble" into the hotel. It was already set up that he's brave and cares about Iori with his previous behaviour so he made the effort and got lucky to find his way there, sure, but then everyone on the bottom floors is dead so no-one's gonna stop him and he gets to the fight and they let him up because Hirohiko doesn't care about him. It's not exactly convoluted.He takes a lift straight to the roof so there's no-one stopping him and from there he's in the hell which he gets saved from.
All that just sounds random to me. Randomly in the "seedy" part of town, randomly finds and follows a Hishaku member, randomly ends up at the supposedly magically sealed hotel, randomly winds up in front of Chihiro, and so on. There's zero reason he should have thought the hotel would lead to Iori. The explanation is maybe 3 panels of how he ends up and it even says "somehow I ended up in this hotel".
Bro he literally says "if a gang's after Iori this is the spot" and mentions he searched all night before seeing the girl he saw at school and following her to the hotel. Did you even read the chapter? Saying "zero reason to think the hotel would lead to Iori" when one of the people who was after her just walked into it in front of him. He doesnt even say "somehow" he ended up in the hotel because literally one of the key villains just walked in there. Also the bit about the hotel being sealed is mentioned right after the detection sorcery is being used and not finding Iori, suggesting the seal prevents using such magic to spy on guests but not that people can't enter like ur suggesting. Reading comprehension is needed
Yes my weeb I'm saying it's too convenient that he knows "the spot" where "the gang" would be hiding out after kidnapping her. How does he know where the Hishaku would be, a gang of 10 core members? How does he randomly stumble upon the Hishaku sorcerer who's just walking about in the spot? The hotel promised complete privacy so I assumed it was locked off to non-sorcerers and seemed to be filled with sorcerers so maybe my assumption there was wrong. My whole point though is a random classmate finds his way to the hotel within half a chapter to conveniently end up in front of Iori. This is half baked and plot convenient. I don't find this kind of writing to be good. As I've already said, this arc needed way more setup than this for how much it's trying to do.
"How does he know where the Hishaku would be, a gang of 10 core members?"
He doesn't. He sees scary people and goes to where scary people hang out."How does he randomly stumble upon the Hishaku sorcerer who's just walking about in the spot?"
Luck. You can see it as obvious writing or whatever but it's the kind of thing you'll see in thousands of stories. It's mentioned he spent hours and hours (the entire night) searching so it isn't that insane."The hotel promised complete privacy so I assumed it was locked off to non-sorcerers and seemed to be filled with sorcerers so maybe my assumption there was wrong."
We see literal dozens of guests armed with swords who don't use magic at all."This is half baked and plot convenient."
Literally nothing wrong with this writing you're thinking about it way too hard creating issues that don't exist for some reason. Literally what is wrong with it? None of your points are good you just waffle about random nonsense and then say "bad writing". The only thing i can see wrong with it is that it relies on luck but, as mentioned, the same can be said for just about every series around. Also all of the events being packed into one chapter can make it seem rushed or worse than it is